Date of publication: 2017-09-04 10:27
Also, please note that even though the refined paragraph is more concise than your original, it still retains all the significant content. The ability to condense and synthesize information is highly prized by admissions committees.
APPLICANTS TO THE MCDONOUGH SCHOOL OF BUSINESS: The McDonough School of Business is a national and global leader in providing graduates with essential ethical, analytical, financial and global perspectives. Please discuss your motivations for studying business at Georgetown.
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it.
6) Please submit a one page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon and your particular major(s), department(s) or program(s). This essay should include the reasons why you 8767 ve chosen the major(s), any goals or relevant work plans and any other information you would like us to know. For freshmen applying to more than one college or program, please mention each college or program to which you are applying. Because our admission committees review applicants by college and program, your essay can impact our final decision. Candidates applying for early decision or transfer may apply to only one college and department.
-In Love Medicine, author Louise Erdrich ’76 writes, 8776 Society is like this card game here, cousin. We got dealt our hand before we were even born, and as we grow we have to play as best as we can. 8776 Describe your 8776 hand 8776 and reflect on how you have played it.
These types of hooks start by surprising the reader with something that may not have known. Provide an interesting fact about something you are going to discuss in your essay’s body and your audience will want to keep reading to learn more.
And finally, a simple but surprisingly effective advice. Taking action is a habit and often the most important step is breaking through the activation energy and taking the first step. After that, keeping your momentum going is comparatively trivial.
I also read your essays with a careful eye toward whether you effectively answered the question. In addition, I closely examined your statements, determining whether more detail or a fresh approach was needed to improve the effectiveness of your essay. Upon review, I feel confident that you addressed all the aspects of this multi-pronged topic, but I have made a number of suggestions for how to improve your essay's delivery.
Please tell us how you have spent the last two summers (or vacations between school years), including any jobs you have held. (Response required in about 655 words.)
- 8776 Dreams are lovely. But they are just dreams, 8776 television producer Shonda Rhimes ’96 told graduating seniors during her 7569 Commencement address. 8776 It’s hard work that makes things happen. It’s hard work that creates change. 8776 What inspires your hard work? What matters to you and how do you “make things happen” to create change?
The most interesting essays will teach the readers something new. If you start your introduction by showing that a commonly accepted truth is actually false, your readers will be instantly hooked.
I read your personal statement with great interest. You do a good job of showing the reader your diligent preparation for a career in education. By emphasizing your research-oriented background and your practical experience in the educational sector, you show that you have the knowledge and resolve to excel in a doctoral program.